My final edit is our financial analysis of Zeta Corporation reveals a spotless financial record and strong year-on-year growth | I'm going to put a period after growth and capitalize sense |
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The excellent report, or maybe just that report will do | If it goes for more that two lines, you need to do the work to split it in two to make it more readable |
The more words you can cut whilst still maintaining your point, the better and more forceful you'll be | Here's our final edit on top with the original sentence on the bottom |
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In terms of keeping your sentences short | Isn't that part of the job of analysis to be thorough? |
For instance, the thorough, well-considered, well-organized report is unnecessary.
Another great editing trick that goes closely with simplicity is brevity | Then I'm going to cut off the financial statements |
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I'm going to start with our thorough analysis of the financial statements of Zeta Corporation | Remember, we are going for the best possible reading experience for your audience |